why i am so lonely?
when i cant feel u near me..
may be its bcuz of this thing that keeps me believing

but what can it be?
this thing that makes me go crazy
it makes me feel bad
that i really breath so hard

it really makes me blue
especially when he is with u
i know i dont have the right to get him out of your sight

but plzzz receive this thing i'm offering
and hope its this you'll be giving
its 'love' what i m saying........

well may be.. there is a huge posibility hehe....

well well well thats not nice thing to say @ wateva... justo name ushtai manchey...

yeah... wateva!

wateva I am just appreciating what I cant, if u can do better than that ..wao..I mean wao.

Gurly has a serious crush I believe...hey put into axns hai otherwise u know how guys r ..they dont remain long like that.

if i write that kinda poems it doesnt mean that it relates to my personal life..... hehe u guys must know that poets have an extra power to imagine things...:P:P

that was what I believed ..helaas it proved to be wrong. U surely have a talent ...post some more will ya??? .....















PLSSSS

hey gurly,
do writer write what they imagine only or something that is in their inner self...i mean what is in their sub concious mind...don't u think they also write about their daily life..maybe not what is happening to them but what they see and feel..anyways good work keep going..

ofcourse sense i will post more :).... ani yea nirman dont u think it wud be kinda boring if i start writing bout my daily life.... well anyways thankx guys for ur support i really appreciate it... thnkx a lot

hoina borin ra non borin ko kura hoina..its all about writing...if u write on ..maybe some would find it borin but at same time there would be someone who will find it interesting...for me i would love to read anything thats written...course book baaheek hai..so i hope u ll write more and post more....Keep writing thats what really matters..

why?
why is it dark?
when I feel you apart
why don't the stars shine?
when I feel that you're not mine
why is the breeze so cold?
when I don't have you to hold
why does it rain?
when I feel in pain
why aren't you here?
when I need you near
tonight I wish
for the stars to shine
so I know you are mine.
Please don't ever go away.

"tonight I wish
for the stars to shine
so I know you are mine."
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I think if u had ended it here, it would be more powerful. This stanza is beautifully composed and has a subtle yet obvious meaning. The last line makes it WAYYYY too obvious and makes a poem looks like a desperate (loud).

Just my two cents. Keep writing. I kindda stopped long tyam back :(
Indisguise:(

makes a poem looks like a desperate (loud)

Read : makes it look desperate (loud).

Sweet and simple.

good work!

thankx nivan , red stone and indisguise...... hey indisguise why did u stop writing dude????? well its not late to start it over isnt it????..... well i m not a gud poet so u can help me :P ..... common i really wanna c ur poems next time if u can then plzzzzzzzz...

are you in love girly_gurl ?
my advice to you; don't ever fall in love at this age otherwise you will end up losing your ................(fill in the blanks)
A) money
B) freedom
C)........



and correct answer is C

ehehe girls dont loose money in love well ur a guy u must know that isnt it... well i about freedom i totally agree but donno what are u trying to say in the third option... can u pllzzz write the word..... or if it's a vulgar word then leave it.......

Nooo no.. girly..its not vulgar.... all he wanted to write was--------->

C) Virginity.
But this should not be a biggie... afta all a guy also looses his :).

On the serious note,

It would be mah pleasure to help u out ( in whatever capacity.. but lemme just tell u one thing.. one can not be a GOOD poet, one either is or ain't)... What i meant by this is, when it comes from heart.. it almost alwys is a god poem :p... as long as one has heart, and i am sure u do.. u should do fine.:).. of course working on it would help u out with how u form and present ur stanzas.

Darn... lamo lecture bhayo..

IndisGuise:)

viginity ?????????????? awww he couldnt even write viginity aww there dont be shy hehe.... juss kidding... lol ofcourse i do have heart if i didnt then i would b most probably in heaven :P...... :P i dont really wanna be a gr8 poet.... i write poems cuz it makes me feel good but only when i m in the mood...

taliya taliya @ indisguise for his lecture... i thought lectures r boring but urs isnt that borning thats anyways for lecturing me hehe...

Kasam maile ta ahile ta kehi pani bujhina. Tara pani i take indi bros words and will try to work on that. Life ma first time poem lekheko yaar maile ta aasti class ko lagi. Malai ta kya ramro lagyo, class mate lai dekhako ta hasidi raako, tut bhanera. Kya bore. Ani tesh pachi arko pani lekhe, aafai lai haas utyo. Aafnu kabita padera. J hoos, creativity ko laagi grade aai halcha, aru ta j sukai hoos.