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Posted on 01-30-05 3:22 PM     Reply [Subscribe]
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Loss


Something about her immaculate art,
Or is it just glowing in between from her fingernails?
Full of memories laden head,
Wet tear stained pillows,
Smell of guilty Oleander in the humid air,
The lost fragment of my soul lays motionless as in the air.

Bushel of joy,
Brush of thou hair,
Good night?s sleep with my new destiny,
More than a dream?

Glance through the stripped soul,
Worn out and torn,
With accumulated sorrows of sorrow.
Unreasonable motion of waking up,
Unquestionable image of provocation in the mirror.

Breathing air feeling the gush of guilt,
Rubbing hands: warm, annoying, moment of truth,
Someone?s been eating my psychedelic feast,
Someone?s been enjoying my loss.


i don't usually post writings and poems but hey ! just felt like it!

could use feedback. i know its not an opus ....but this is how u learn rt folks?



 
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"Someone?s been eating my psychedelic feast,
Someone?s been enjoying my loss." Pink Floyd

Ah Pink Floyd, the age old self torture of wondering... Very well summarized by those two lines. The mind that is the magician as well as the witch alternating between healing and devouring.

I wish you'd continue to write and share.


 
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"something abt her immaculate art
or is it just glowing in her fingernails?"

"someone's been eating my psychedelic feast
someone's been enjoying my loss"

nice one.
 
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If you say it's not an opus, well... for me it's objet d'art, if nothing more. :)

Enjoyed it tremendously. Please keep on posting. Perhaps sometime soon i might dare to garnish sajha with one of my own.

Yeh dil mangein Moreeeeeeeeeeeee...
IndisGuise:)
 
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thanks guys. i always was a little conscious of my writings because subject matter associations are always odd, and gets even bizzare when u are at the end of a piece.
maybe i got it from books like "interzone" from william s. burroughs, writings like "naked lunch" or even just maybe syd barrett', jim morrison's , bob dylan's influence.

but one thing i never forget is: u know when u write something u just read it again and hit delete because the stuff you wrote is so simple, i have noticed that the simple stuff is what you want to keep, the embelishments and garnishes are the things you can delete and rewrite it.....

anyways i don't know why i'm writing all this.......

Sitara: i always like your analogies and connections. they are so pure " brain:- witch alternating between healing and devouring. " very true.

ardent, ruina:- thanks

indisguise:- definitely want to read some of your pieces....objet d'art ! if i were a girl i wud definitely blush rt now!

writings shall keep coming.......

peace






 


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