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Posted on 02-02-06 12:31 PM     Reply [Subscribe]
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Where are you…. going? Bhawana finished the question after a series of sneezes.
I say I don’t believe in superstition, and fight with myself to think the same way. However, I don’t like when someone asks me where am I going when I am ready to walk out with hope for something positive. When the question is coupled… well not just coupled but compounded with multiple sneezes, my dislike for her disruptive question soared. I know she knows the answer, or at least has a solid or even accurate guess. I can read the answer I am expected to spell out reflecting right in her tired eyes, which seem to struggle to spark with disgust. I know the answer –if I say- will flare up another round of argument. We tend to feel the same (win/loss) when we argue on the matter in question. The topic of the argument switches between its face territory and our ego so often and so swiftly that we scramble regularly –during argument- to figure out what ‘re we arguing about.

I already had decided not to answer her “where are you going” question. Therefore, I just picked up the car keys and headed out. I could hear her screaming, “I am sick too. How about me?” as I stepped out. Yeah, she has flu. But, Sweta? …. I wish she had the same. Just flu. I wish.

I know Sweta since when she joined our school at class 4. I must be honest in saying that she was not one of the beautiful girls even in the class. Forget about the school. At 4th grade, what I mean by beauty is purely aesthetic and nothing beyond. Although definition of beauty pretty much remain the same but the definition of girls developed to be a dynamic one as we ventured out to higher grades.

When we (a bunch of guys I used to hang out with then) reached the 8th grade, girls meant a welcomed confusion to us. Most of the time, we were dazed around them. Sweta rarely provoked any attention from any of us. She had all what we used to talk about all the time yet we stayed away from her. I should not flicker for truth. So, here it is. Whatever beauty she may have was overshadowed by one of her legs. She used to limp a bit on the right side. If we got nothing much exciting going on, we used to pick on her limping leg and pronounce an unwarranted name “Langadi” for her. I sink as I write the “L” word here, but the truth does not change to compliment my wish.

It was raining that afternoon. I was on my bicycle racing toward Sweta’s neighborhood. Of course, not for her but for Sristi. Sristi was the one who used to pump all of our hearts in all sorts of variations in or outside of the class. Since the reward was priceless, the competition was tough. I was open to Anita, Sumi, and many others as well but Sristi was Sristi. I was just hoping to get there before evening could descend challenging the already fading visibility. I hoped to see her but hoped she would see me too. Even hoped our eyes meeting mid air on their way to hit us. The sky was getting darker with rapidly moving dark clouds. Roaring thunders were annoying me breaking up my chain of thoughts Sristi commanded. People were retreated to their homes. It was a secluded neighborhood dominated with big and fancy houses with compound walls. I had to pass Sweta’s house to reach Sristi’s. I neither wished to see Sweta, nor I wanted her to see me paddling through. So, I sped as I approached her house. Just then a yellow-top perhaps 1973 toyota Corolla taxi continued running in opposite direction splashing the mud water all over me. Humiliation? even that in front of a girl’s (I didn’t care for her but still…) house! I got furious, and yelled - looking at the distancing cab - all the curses I could come up with at the driver, who I doubt heard anything I screamed out. But then….just then…damn!.....
 
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Posted on 02-04-06 12:34 AM     Reply [Subscribe]
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दीप्ज्यू,
सादर अभिनन्दन्, हाजिर अबेला टक्र्याएको मा माफ पाउ, तर देर आए पनि आए दुरुस्त्, होईन त ?

Always in awe of your writing skills.

John
 
Posted on 02-04-06 1:58 PM     Reply [Subscribe]
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Jhakkas......absolutely JHAKKKKKKKASSS !!!
 
Posted on 02-04-06 2:25 PM     Reply [Subscribe]
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Deep dai,
Truly enjoyed reading it.
 
Posted on 02-04-06 4:31 PM     Reply [Subscribe]
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काँ उडाम्नु दाइ, गुरुहरुलाई हामीले उडायो भने त सरस्वतीले सरापीहाल्छन् नि!!!!..:)
लेख्दै गरम् है दाजु!!!! दिप दाईको कलमले हाम्रा आँखामा यसरी नै उज्यालो छरिरहोस्!!!!
 
Posted on 02-06-06 8:56 AM     Reply [Subscribe]
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Shaq bro, power ballko tikas ta kinne garya chha ni...haina ta? ki tikas nakini handini power ball? sapana ma ta maile ni dorha kha ho powerball lai tara bipana ma kach.chi bhera khattam!

Chiplebro, yatra samsmaran le nepali tira udako udakai chha...man sthir parnai garho gam gharko samjhana baljhera...

kumale le bhiyut dya re chha ...rittai ho ki dahi bha ho thammyauna khojda khojdai yeti bela bhai sake chha...

John Galt, Swasti gare prabho! yata radi tira basum...tyo gundri tira ta hamro aasan ho..
ma ta dhanne bhaye prabhoko tippani padhera....udayaman suryako darshan garna paunu deepkoi saubhagya matrai haina prerana pani ho...

Oysbro,
kata ho bro? Oys ko nam dekhna sath hadigauko samjhana aaihalyo...tyo pokhari ra jatra ko drishya aankha ma failenchha dukha dina lai

psycho ...swagat chha hai

Nirmanbro...ma ta afulai lekhan kshetrako euta sukumbasi manchhu...sajhaka hasti lekhak lekhika saraha bro le pani afno kshetra darta gari sakya chha...mero subhakamana ra abhinandan.

Thank you, all.
 
Posted on 02-06-06 1:00 PM     Reply [Subscribe]
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A nice story....what happens next???
 
Posted on 02-06-06 4:40 PM     Reply [Subscribe]
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Cerina,
"A nice story"

Thanks.

"....what happens next???"

That is upto you, now.
 
Posted on 02-06-06 4:44 PM     Reply [Subscribe]
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"....what happens next???"

That is upto you, now.


Suspense rakhne kaam ma kasle jitos Deep lai :)
 
Posted on 02-07-06 9:15 AM     Reply [Subscribe]
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Chiple bro,

Byatha jun byakhya garna paros
Jetha jun dekhauna paros
Aastha jun pramanit garna paros
Ke mulya ti chhadma aayam ka
Jun nangyaudai dekhauna paros!

Swasti, Prabho.

In my opinion, no piece of literature should not end with the final period (full stop). Literature is nothing but imagination. the word "imagination" is not defined with fiction or nonfiction definition but in relation with readers' understanding. Since the literature is abstract, it is always dynamic. So, we should not try to see it as a concrete object. Just my thought.

Chiplebro kai yatra samsmaranka kura garau...yatra sakiye pani samsmaran ka kramma utheka aayayam haru pani ke yatra sangai tunginchhan ta?
 
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It's up to me??? Awwww ..i am not that imaginative
 
Posted on 02-07-06 5:07 PM     Reply [Subscribe]
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Deep: Nice story - enjoyed it.
 
Posted on 02-08-06 11:52 AM     Reply [Subscribe]
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AeutiKT:
"Awwww ..i am not that imaginative "

If you were not, you wouldn't have said what you said above. Imaginations are as free as free can be so are not tied up as accuracy. What you think "happens next" does not have to match up with anyone's "what happens next". What happens next in a fiction is whatever the reader wants. An author loses his/her control over the piece he/she has written once the readers start reading that piece. Then, the control shifts to the readers.

Sajha gazer, thanks.
 
Posted on 10-03-07 6:57 PM     Reply [Subscribe]
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Posted on 10-03-07 7:37 PM     Reply [Subscribe]
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Adding to Favorites..!!


Will read it later.

Last edited: 03-Oct-07 07:37 PM

 
Posted on 10-03-07 8:37 PM     Reply [Subscribe]
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Nice story.

 


 
Posted on 10-04-07 7:15 AM     Reply [Subscribe]
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Deep jyu as usual great story. 

 
Posted on 10-04-07 10:49 AM     Reply [Subscribe]
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A very nice read Deep.. I wanna know what happens next? Don't tell me something terrible happens to Sweta .In that case, i'd have to chop Bhawana's nose
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Posted on 10-05-07 10:21 AM     Reply [Subscribe]
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So what did Sweta had to tell you?

Khoi bujhiyena hajoor, yo khopdi alik baaklo cha, sajilo sanga kuro pasdaina.


 
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kasto ramro katha !!!!!!
 



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