Sure, I went to the phase when I thought my dad was a hero. I thought nobody was stronger and wiser than my dad. But gradually I became “wiser” myself and realized that he was just a commoner. I still remember when every question he used to raise at me were answered enthusiastically, like “who wants to goto bazaar?” “Me! Me!! Me!!!” I also remember, how quickly those enthusiasm were taken over by indifference and his offers used to just escape from another ear, when I grew over 8 years old. My hero dad was downgraded to be a character artist, while I idolized my friend, Vineet’s dad. I don’t know why, don’t ask me now.

Dad worked hard, sure, mom was a housewife so he had to. He had to, to keep up with our rising bills and our demand to goto the same school as our peers from neighborhood. I started drifting away from home, would come late. I was well liked outside, I just didn’t care much inside my own house. I would dread the I had to walk with my parents. We used to goto our relatives during festivities, and I couldn’t skip those visits. Well, I had some incentives, I’d get some “dakshina” in return. Every time we used to walk pass the Tundikhel, my dad would pause for a while, would stretch his chest, almost unbuttoning his shirt with the sheer force of buffed up chest, and give a tight salute. I’d die with shame every single time he did that. I’d just keep on walking as if I didn’t notice him doing that gesture. He was a retired army Subedar, you see, and he was proud of his service time. He was also proud of his current job of a school teacher, but no single job could have wiped his memory away from his glorious days of Royal Nepal Armies (though he didn’t have any wartime stories to tell).

Flippu, where is your old fan Divya Raj Koirala nowadays? Can't see his comments anymore nowadays..

Katrina Madam,
How would I know his whereabouts? But I sniff old wine in a new bottle. How about that?

Sorry flip_flop, as I said, I am surprise myself. Almost all of my previous stories had been in narration form (with me playing the character myself), and nobody thought that was for real. This time, everybody thought it was a real story.
ImI, Camoflaged, meera, shweta, Gautam, Tyra, Poonte,ss74k, thanks for going through it.

hey DWI..i thought that the story is true and i cried a lot...kasto dhoka diyeko...

Flips,

Old wine in a new bottle? Definitely not!

hahaha..great..got me:)

anyways seems like first person narration is relatively easy to write as a feeling.there is more attraction and more personalized.A second or third person narration just becomes story.

BUT ..
remembero use first person only is it is true man..u cannot mislead people like that.it just doesn't become story anymore when it is first person.

Giving life to your fictional characters is your craftmanship DWI. Wonder where you been hiding these days! But still I would like to wish the "father" for a quick recovery. :)

Flips? I guess only one person call me by that name. "An apple a day keeps a doctor away". Just a guess.:)

** calls

So add one more in the count, flips -;

Flip_flop, it's hard to keep up with Sajha with a busy schedule. But I do enjoy nice stories here. I wasn't hiding.

ImI, I guess I have to put a disclaimer next time. But again, to my defense, I have written, maybe about 6-8 (blue sky, green eyes, red roulette, lone star, seto bagh etc etc) stories in Sajha and most of them were in first person narration. I never got this reaction before.

Oh yeah, flip_flop, the dad is recovering now. He is back at his place. The son is in Australia and is planning to come back with his wife, this time he will stay for a month..he might eventually move for good. (disclaimer: THIS IS NOT A REAL STORY)!!

DWI,
i read your setobagh and blue sky..they are in first person but there is big difference in between the those stories and this.In setobagh u r doctor and your are killing people ..hahaha do u want people to believe that?in blue sky ..you should have been dead ..how would you be writing story? so , see you found the exact time to right a maybe possible true story..i think the timing was right and emotions were high.This story wasn't unrealistic like other ones..

while i was driving to work i was thinking ..see if your write a story in first person then you do not become a great story teller you become story writer..:)
- but see these writers like R.k narayan , jeffery archer,leo tolestoy,o.henry they can capture same things in second and third person narration .Being able to write in Second and third person getting the same kind of emotions pouring would be much more difficult.this is what i believe.

but please don't think i didn't like your stories..i am just being little critical . i loved it:)

DWI - u made me choke man...napkin pani chaina chaiyeko bela... hope things turn out great for u...

Salute to u sire..

DWI,
you are one heck of a "lekhak". Good to read you bro.

छि, हुदै नभा कुरा लेखेर सबै लाइ रुवाउन खोज्ने कस्तो DWI होला , अनि आफु चाइ हामि सबै को रुन्चे कमेन्ट् हेर्दै हास्दै बस्या होला ल पक्का पनि :(

Deep bro. Thanks, means a lot. Atleast you didn't read it as a real story.

Sorry Tyra, I guess I really mislead everybody eh? Now it has become so controversial, I might as well have just said it was a real story. Then again, I had to admit my other stories were real too.

Please do not read it as a momoir. It is just an attempt towards a literary piece. An attempt that was evaluated differently, and I take the blame. Who else?

Huh,aba ye to ati bhayo,n i thought its real.
DWI,timilai to pitne mann gari ra chha X-(
disclaimer to laganu parcha.
I am new here in sajha,so havent read ur other stories
n wasnt aware that u write.
i really got carried away by ur story.
btw,i liked ur story,good work
Keep it up!

Shweta

DWI,

One of the most heart rending stories i have read in recent times, it was sum_off first and then it is you. The common factor I find in both these posts is, realizing the ultimate truth which was clouded by guilt and embarrassment initially.

Your dad indeed needs salutation, but you need too my friend, to have acknowledged his pride and your remorse.

As far as the dakshina goes, I wish I could still get a few.

Huh....was it a fiction??? I sure must have missed some threads.

lau John_Galt also thought it's a true story. :)
Nice one DWI.