I have written this lyric.I don't know it is good/bad/worse. I need your help.Does this lyric deserve to be composed?You know for that I have to spend some money.Please,help.

"I need a true friend in life"

verse1:

I want my love stay with me,
even the world goes past me
I choose my tears to comfort me,
than all the rivers go past me

verse2:

Everyday is the hard day to spend,
without a friend
But never dies the hope at the end,
when there is love to mend

chorus:
I need a true friend in life,to carry on
With happiness and worry of the world to live on
I need a true friend in life, who understands
The forms of hearts, and the minds

verse3:

I build my dream and the shelter
I share my love and the prayer
Oh! my friend,hold my hand
I take you over the sky,under the land

repeat chorus:

Bridge:

I can live all my life for my love
I can give everything I have for my love
I know I will be broken in a failure
Like a wrecked ship in the sea,without a sailor

repeat chorus:

Give an emotional touch...this one is kinda common....

Something like this?

There is more to love than this
Love is more than just a kiss
Will we take you to that step?
Will we do more than just connect?
And will you, bring the thunder in my life?
And the fire in my eyes?
Cause then there, will be days of pleasure when
Everything far will be so near,

I have never felt thunder
And lighting like this.
I have never been struck by
A wonder like this...... lalallaaaaaaaaaa :)

Ladyinred,I appreciate you help.Could you please rewrite the whole lyric?...

one more poem >>

A Beautiful Summer day


It was a beautiful summerday
A windy tree
On the shadow a bench
you were sitting there
A quite place
you seemed to look in all directions
time after time
you were singing,playing
and suddenly a lot of silence.


The sky was all blue
the sceanaries were everywhere
But I was watching you
thinking love,life and death
It was like a paradise
you were like an angel
The wait like for someone
for something to be happened


The summer day,my life
The windy tree,my love
The shadowed bench,my heart
when you are siting there
I will come to encounter you
I have thousands things to say
But I can't
Who can translate a heart?
see me
see my eyes
Aren't they deeper than the oceans?


Oh! my love!
take me to your shy world,where love is everything.
Forever,forever

i am sorry but i have to let you know man, those three or 4 lyrics thats posted man, are those for kindergarden kids or something?? Like Simon would say "Find someother profession."

लालपारिका कति मिठा श्बद!
एनिटाइम ज्यु, योर लिरिक्स नीड ए लट अफ वर्क