I keep seeing your post, but when I wanted to respond, I couldn't find it. So starting a new one.
This probably would be a worthless post, but I thought for once somebody should say something after seeing you keeping posting your samples so many times; you deserve to get an honest feedback for your work. Not an expert, but might help an aspiring musician as well (specially the bottom three pointers).
While I admire your perseverance, I also hope to provide you some criticism so that either you get better at this game or spend your time on better stuff.
First of all, I am no music genius or a label producer, so take my advice with grain of salt.
That said, I do enjoy every genre of music and feel like I can provide some comments.
"Destructive" Criticism:
1. Let's take a look at what you have posted. You pretty much picked up "Char Bottle Vodka" by Yo-Yo Honey Singh and Karaoke'd over it. Let's be real, this ain't a remix, this is Karaoke over a remixed version.
Nothing wrong with that, if that's all what you are, a Karaoke singer. I am not a fan of Honey Singh, and I don't like this song, but at least the original one is bearable.
2. Let's look at the lyrics. You simply translated the song in hindi to Nepali. Where's the creativity? Even with the translation, you could've added some of your own flavor. None was noted.
3. Last aspect of this song is the voice. There's no one style for rap/Hip-hop; many times you don't even need to know how to sing, but yours sounded very very raw. Probably its because of the amateur (or immature) recording, probably it is your voice.
Nothing about that song worked.
Now, let's get to the Constructive criticism part.
1. Perhaps, you should spend more time on lyrics. Read some literary poems, classic ones or contemporary. If that bores you, read (not listen) some good songs (
Nas: any song from Illmatic, Mos Def: any song from Mathematics).
Get inspired and write something. Doesn't have to rhyme at first, but has to have some meaning. Try it, then try to rhyme the words. Music will come later.
2. Next, know your limits. You aren't a singer. You don't have to be; just drop the verses. Might want to play with tempo a little, fast and slow and see what works.
3. Finally, get the beat and hook. You can simply remix old songs for this if you aren't good at it (most of us aren't).
Please work on this.
Start with no#1. It will not be done in one day, might take a year. But if you really want to do something, do something worthwhile.
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Last edited: 15-Dec-15 03:28 PM
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